With the use of figurative language, diction, and imagery Ezekiel J. Emanuel persuades the reader that chewing gum has health benefits for everybody.
Using figurative language, the author helps convince the reader that chewing gum is not a bad thing. With the extensive use of personification, Emanuel immerses the reader in the essay and proves that gum is not all bad. In paragraph 2, Emanuel says, "Like chocolate and coffee, gum is now being rehabilitated"(para 2). Since gum itself cannot be rehabilitated, it is being personified. This example is used to show the opposers of gum that changes have been made to make gum healthy and to convince the reader that gum could be good. Another example of figurative language is, "The human mouth is host to many bacteria" (para. 3). This makes the reader feel a sense of urgency in determining better oral hygiene. The author has a solution for this problem: chewing gum.
Emanuel also uses diction to prove his point to the reader. Emanuel says, "Replacing sugar in gum with xylitol, a naturally occurring sweetener found in fruits and vegetables that has fewer calories than regular sugar, fixes this problem" (para. 4). The word calories, is especially important to readers. In a time of overwhelming amounts of obese people, people are very health conscious and find the idea of fewer calories intriguing. This helps prove Emanuel's point about chewing gum as being a healthy alternative to oral hygiene issues.
Finally, the author uses imagery to provide appealing for the readers of the article. "W[hen] I was growing up, you would be sent down to the principal’s office for chewing gum in school" this sentence helps the reader relate to the topic of this article (para. 1). Seemingly everyone has gotten in trouble at least once and school and can all imagine themselves in this position. This makes the reader connect to the topic at hand and feel as if they have been in the same place.
With the use of figurative language, diction, and imagery, Emanuel persuades the reader that the benefits to chewing gum outweigh the piles of gum underneath desks.
With the use of figurative language, diction, and imagery, Emanuel persuades the reader that the benefits to chewing gum outweigh the piles of gum underneath desks.
You did a very nice job of supporting your poisition. Your usage of quotes is very helpful to your point. I also like how you used real life things to persuade the reader. I mean no one can deny that the word "calories" does mean something to us. It really helps enfore your position by tying in examples everyone can relate to. Nice job! There are a few minor erros like "W[hen]" should be "[When]." And also the length is a little short but if you said all that you needed to say then I am sure it is fine! Nice job overall!
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ReplyDeleteExcellent job with this post! You successfully supported three of the rhetoric devices in a way that is informative but also interesting to the reader. I feel that your diction paragraph could be even stronger with one more example on how Emanuel's use of diction affected the work as a whole. Overall you address your ideas with eloquence!
ReplyDeleteOne aspect of your essay that could improve is your introductory paragraph. In my opinion, it is not enough to state your thesis. You should introduce the topic and give a brief overview of the article before jumping straight in to the body paragraphs. Overall I really enjoyed this post!
Last month, your peer reviewers commented on organization and syntax. Your organization is excellent in this post, and your syntax is better--you still need to proofread just a bit more carefully. For next time, try to incorporate more examples--three per paragraph is a good goal to shoot for. And really think about strong examples, because one of the complaints last time is that you don't always choose strong examples, and you do have weaker examples in the diction and imagery paragraphs in this post.
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